It's a very good story foundation but I very much recommend a good editor/proofreader as there are tons of grammar issues and some typos. The description alone has your instead of you're and a bunch of run-on sentences.
Wishing the best as I really do want to see this story grow and thrive!!
So glad to hear from you again and to play this game again! I still have the old version installed because I refused to remove it, it's still such a fun game. ❤️